Wednesday, October 1, 2008

First draft of the poems

 Bengali Poems

 

I will try to post them in Bengali font on the Bengali magazine site soon. I need some feedback on these ones first.

 

Written by: Nani Chanda

 

Bhalobasha

 

Loktaakey Kosminkaaleo jaantam naa

 

 

Ekdin kothai kothai take bollam

Aamar ekdom bhalo laagchey naa

Aamaro to taai; shey bollo

 

 

Aaami bhaablam Aapod

 

Onyodin swabhabik khushitei taakey bollam

Aamar aaj bhishan bhaalo laagchey

Aamaro kintu taai ; shey bollo

 

Aami bujhlam , aamar samuha bipod

 

 

 

 

Khoon

Ekta Cheley

Taar maa baaba bhaai bon aar

Ek chiltey  ghar niyei shudhu  baachar swapno dekhchilo

 

Shei cheley

Ekdin

Itihaasher aahbane taar

Purano swapnoguli key saarthak korar proyojoney

Deshtaakey prothom baachatey gelo

 

Dur chaai

Cheletai maara gelo

 

 

Rupasi naari

Nijer naarikey sambhoger icchai

Purushtir sabal aakorshan

Eki muhurtey amritpaaner  akanhkai

Shishutir aakul krandan

 

Maajhkhaaney bichalito naari

 

Baa stane shishutir jonmo data

Dokkhin bookey jonmodaatar sontan

Du paashey duti obujhkey niye

Maajhkhaaney bichalito naariti shoyoney

 

 

2 comments:

Anonymous said...

bhalobasha : very amateurish

khoon : okay but very common thoughts

on the whole , nothing distinguishable . only they who are away from bengali literature or poetry will find them worth reading

a long way 2 go!!!

Rahiakil said...

Thanks for your comments, One step at a time,
They are not mine, but the person behind them will take your comments with an open heart,
If you know about some one who could contribute, that would help.
Please, take that as a request from a struggling editor